Tuesday, January 20, 2009

Friend Prompt

My friend is riding his bike in the mountains with his dad. One of his wheels appear to be loose! the wheel instantly snaps off, sending him flying into the air. He falls on top of his leg, and his dad described it as " The sound I never wanted to hear". My friend's leg is broken. I would describe myself as a caring friend. Caring is my specialty because I am willing to do whatever it takes in order to make sure my friends are in the best care. If my friend is injured, immediately, I would go visit them with a gift card. Listening to my friend's feelings when they're sad is horrible because nobody likes to see tears, right? But I usually try to cheer them up with a funny joke. That always does the trick. Moments later, the tears that had emerged from their eyes before are now flipped back to its normal, happy self. When my friend is angry, it's just as easy as helping a sad friend... by making them laugh with a funny picture. Therefore, I will remain extremely dedicated to providing assistance for a wounded, sad, or even an angry friend, and that's why I can proudly consider myself a true caring friend.

4 comments:

  1. What's up! I really liked how you gave imagery in your piece and made sure you stayed on topic. Your hook was awesome and the ending was too because they tied together. The only thing I think you should work on is your details just make them alittle clearer.

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  2. Sup I think that is a cool story because the intnroduction. Another thing I like is the imaergy. I dont think you need to work on anything

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  3. Denzel Ilike how you gave realy good description like if i was there. you could re-word your senteces like where it says "...injured,immediatly,I would go visit them with a gift card" you could re-word it like this"...injured, I would immediatly visit them with a gift card. other than that it was great.

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